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글제목  14/10/2015
글쓴이  신소정 작성일  2015-10-14
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I made my smartphone updated a few days ago. But, it didn't work well. When I saw some article with it, it stopped suddenly. And some applications worked very slowly. I felt very uncomfortable. Yesterday, finally, I made it reset. It annoyed me even though smartphone had the function to back up data before reset and download them after reset. I shouldn't have updated it. I wasted much time mading it updated and reset. And I was very surprised that I had used so many applictions and I had done many things with the smartphone. I have been used to the smartphone just for a few years.

 

 

 

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I made (updated) my smartphone updated a few days ago. But, it didn't work well. When I saw some  (tried to read an) article with it, it stopped suddenly. And some applications worked very slowly. I felt very uncomfortable. Yesterday, finally, I made (reset) it reset. It annoyed me even though (the) smartphone had (has) the function to back up data before reset(ing) and (to) download them (it) after reset(ing). I shouldn't have updated it. I wasted much (a lot of) time mading it updated and reset (updating and resetting it). And I was very surprised that I had used so many applictions and I had done (so) many things with the smartphone. I have been used to (using) the smartphone (for) just for a few years.

 

 

Dear Julie,

 

Thanks for sending this writing. I have edited it for you. I hope you find this helpful. Thanks so much and have a good one. 

 

Kindest,

 

Lindsay  

 

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Dear Julie,

Thanks for sending this writing. I have edited it for you. I hope you find this helpful. Thanks so much and have a good one.

Kindest,

Lindsay
2015-10-15
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