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글쓴이  유아 작성일  2015-06-06
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If I can create a holiday, I would like to make a day for "self". In korea, people celebrate many hoilday for other people, including parent's day and teacher's day. On such days, people have a think about their effort and thank them. However, If I am not teacher and parent, I do not have the days for myself. It is necessary that people celebrate for themselves and there are seveal reasons why people should spend time for "selves".
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If I can create a holiday, I would like to make a day for "self". In korea, people celebrate many hoilday for other people, including parent's day and teacher's day. On such days, people have a think about their effort and thank them. However, If I am not teacher and parent, I do not have the days for myself. It is necessary that people celebrate for themselves and there are seveal reasons why people should spend time for "selves".

Here is the revision….

If I can create a holiday, I would like to make a holiday for myself. In Korea, people celebrate many holidays including parent's day and teacher's day. On such days, people acknowledge and thank their parents and teachers for their love and support. However, If I am not a teacher and a parent, I will not have a chance to celebrate these holidays for myself. It is necessary that people celebrate holidays for themselves and there are several reasons why people should spend time for themselves.

Other expressions to use:

People have taken out the time to appreciate what their parents and teachers have done.
People express their gratitude to their parents and teachers for their love and support.
2015-06-10
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